[Academy Student] Kagemaru, Masaru [Rikuhi]

[Amino]

Name: Kagemaru, Masaru

Age: 10

Gender: Male

Height: 4’5”

Weight: 115

Appearance:
Hair: Short jet black hair that comes just in front of the eyes in the front. He wears a blue head band under it to keep the hair out his eyes.
Eyes: Green eyes with an almost copper tint to it. When looked into it, you can almost see a ring inside of it.
Skin: A Copper-toned skin that seems to shine in the right lighting.
Build: Lithe, slightly on the athletic side from harsh training. His has slight scars from the training over his body.
Clothes: A black, sleeveless shirt void of any design, and a pair of denim shorts. Has a brown belt with dark blue pouches on the sides to carry items. Also wears a blue sweatband with the Kagemaru clan symbol sewn into it around his right arm. Has bandages around his arms and hands about mid way to the elbow. Has on a pair of sandals with leather straps that come over the foot and over the heels.

Level/Rank: AS

Village: Rikuhi

Clan: Euria, Kagemaru

Language: Common (Rikuhuu accent), Rikuhuu (Fluent)

Main/Favored Weapon: N/A

Side Arms: (In Dark Blue pouches on the side)
-2 Smoke Bombs
-2 Kunai
-1 soldier pill
-1 blood pill
-1 water pill
-1 flash bomb
-Ointment 20 oz

Element: Raiton

Fighting Style: A self trained between martial arts with direct, non classical and straightforward movements with minimal movement with maximum effect and extreme speed of his hands and feet with kicking, punching, trapping and grappling that flow smoothly between and together. Unlike more traditional martial arts, is not fixed or patterned, and done with guiding thoughts from training and done without thinking. Its strongest idea is the concept of interception, or attacking your opponent while he is about to attack. Learning it and now believing that combat was spontaneous, and that a martial artist cannot predict it, only react to it, and that a good martial artist should "Be like water" and move fluidly without hesitation.

Physical Strengths:
-Very Good Agility
-Good Speed
-Great Flexibility
-Good Stamina
-Good Strength
-Very Good Reflexes

Physical Weaknesses:
-Horrible Throwing Accuracy
-Very Bad to Poison (+3 Posts)
-Heavy Bleeder (Very Bad)
-Bad Chakra Pool
-Bad Chakra Control
-Bad eye sight

Mental Strengths:
-Very good Reaction
-Above Average Pain Tolerance
-Quick Thinker

Mental Weaknesses:
-Arachnophobia - Upon coming across them, he has a complete mental breakdown and becomes completely unresponsive to anything but pain.
-Highly impulsive
-Ill Tempered

Jutsu:
Henge no Jutsu
Bunshin no Jutsu
Kawarimi no Jutsu

Pull (motions his opponent to come forth as a taunt.)

Spoiler!

Pull
Rank: D
Requirements: None
Description: The target will feel their body being pulled towards the user
Duration: 1 post

Ametsuchi Rendan

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Ametsuchi Rendan [Heaven and Earth Combo]
Rank: E
Requirements: None.
Description: The user quickly performs three: low, middle, and high reverse kicks in succession.

Background:
Masaru was born as a product of a beautiful marriage, born in the fortress of the Euria clan in Rikuhi. His parents are the proud owners of the Eurian Ice cream shop, a favored place inside of the fortress. Every day he awoke, he got to see many happy people, enter in and out of the shop, grabbing ice cream for days and days. Everything is usually very peaceful.

When he got to the age of five, it was time for him to undergo the Eurian ritual and began his training under the Eurian arts of fighting. Each day he practiced diligently, although he didn’t neccesarily agree with the Eurian way of not using chakra. He began to feel his chakra pool growing inside of him as he was gaining greater skills in fighter. He loved close up fighting, but he also loved the thought of using chakra to enhance his fighing ways.

When he got to the age of 9, he learned his first genjutsu. Pull. After days and weeks of practice on the technique, he used it in a Taiketsu fight against another Eurian boy. This was a no no. The Taiketsu ring was a sacred place, Ninjutsu and Genjutsu was a sin in this arena, and said never ever to be used here. He was badly punished by his elders, and his parents.

During that same night, after undergoing a harsh beating from those he held dear, as he was sitting out on his porch crying his eyes out feeling guilt for his sin in the Taiketsu arena. A man approached him, it was the prince of the Euria clan, Jashinru Kagemaru. He told Jashinru of his Sin, and begged at his feet for him not to punish him as well, Jashinru laughed and told the boy to raise his head. He wasn’t there to punish him. In fact he was there to offer him an opportunity, he watched his match against the other Eurian boy the other day and was rather quite impressed with his use of the technique.

He told him, that he was indeed wrong for using it in the Taiketsu arena, but genjutsu didn’t have to be a burden upon his fighting. Jashinru offered to train him, and let him use whatever skill he wished under guidance of the Kagemaru clan. In exchange, in one years time he had to join the ninja academy and serve under Rikuhi. At the time, Jashinru was a Hyougaan nin, so he said this was his way of giving back to Rikuhi. Masaru agreed, and Jashinru asked the boys parents for there blessings. They were honored to let Jashinru train the boy.

After one year, of harsh, brutal, bitter and tiring training. The training, proved to be well worth the results, all of his years of study with the Euria, and one year of training amongst the Kagemaru all led up to this. He joined the Academy, as was agreed, and here he is.

[Amino]

Been inactive for a long while, and figured I'd come back. I'm posting this as a replacement for my last character.

[Itamimaru]

FINALLY!

Oh nothing well first you should have Fluent with your Rikuhuu language okay buddy and get Kage to approve you for his clans, and if you want you could add one more item to your side arms you get eight different items in total

Then just work on your mental stats and you'll be just fine

[Spacemaker]

Main/Favored Weapon: N/A Remove or put as WIP

Side Arms: Say where they are kept.

Fighting Type: Remove until Genin

Fighting Style: Highly aggressive. Uses a self-taught Hand-to-Hand combat with emphasis on quick motions and pin-point strikes. Add a bit more hun, or remove.

Physical Strengths:
-Above Average Agility
-Above Average Speed
-Great Flexibility
-Good Stamina
-Good Strength
-Good Reflexes

Physical Weaknesses:
-Horrible Throwing Accuracy
-Susceptible to Katon(Fire) (Very Bad) put as bad in my opinion
-Heavy Bleeder
-Bad Chakra Pool
-Bad Chakra Control
-Bad eye sight [past 20 meters everything is a blur]

Mental Strengths:
-Very good Reaction
-Above Average Pain Tolerance
-Quick Thinker

Mental Weaknesses:
-Arachnophobia - Upon coming across them, he has a complete mental breakdown and becomes completely unresponsive to anything but pain.
-Highly impulsive
-Ill Tempered

Add a bit more to appearance also, it's a bit shallow there.

[Zhal42]

I think an athletic/Lithe 10 year old who is 4'5'' should be quite a bit less than 145 pounds (that would make him very overweight)

heavy bleeder is a serious weakness. Not sure, but in my opinion if you want to keep it then you could bump up a strength to balance it out. If you keep it you may want to change it to 'Hemophilia' to sound smarter XD

[Amino]

Made the edits, not sure WHY I had 145 down for weight, thanks for pointing that out.

Descriptions were incredibly lacking, so I fixed those up for your reading pleasure. Thanks for that too. ;p

Gotta say though, wasn't aiming for hemophilia. He supposed to bleed more, but not THAT much more.

[Spacemaker]

Remove Main weapon, put it as WIP or fill it with something

Remove fighting Type, you don't get one until Genin.

Change elemental weakness to Bad, VB and Horrible are usually reserved for a dual elemental weakness.

[Orion]

Remove Main weapon, put it as WIP or fill it with something
N/A is very much fine. Though he could just take it off, his rpc (being he was off the forum so long) is very much able to rank up soon. He also classified as N/A so it is the same as it not beig there or placing omit. He is fine. If it was something really bad like he forgot something or removed something he needed then yes I understand. This isn't improtant.

Remove fighting Type, you don't get one until Genin.
I'm goin to have to kinda of agree here though N/A should be just fine. I like having things like that on my rpcs cause I can work on them in wip easier

Change elemental weakness to Bad, VB and Horrible are usually reserved for a dual elemental weakness.
I have had single element weaknesses that were higher than very bad. And I have seen it on other threads. Unless a mod, anbu helper or someone with great rpc editing saids other wise, it should be fine also

Comments in purple

[Itamimaru]

Only the most effective elements are allowed to go higher than Bad which is only Raiton and Katon, some others can be helped towards that but it all depends on the effect it has the explanation in the weakness determines how far it can go but Katon and Raiton can go far they are the most effective elements for such weaknesses....his fire weakness saying he burns easier than normal is legit at that level

[Zhal42]

Gotta say though, wasn't aiming for hemophilia. He supposed to bleed more, but not THAT much more.

In that case you should specify exactly how much more he will bleed. Make it as clear as possible so no one else confuses it with hemophilia. I have to say it may be worth it to change the weakness completely. I'm not too fond of this type of weakness, and it will knock you out of a fight much quicker than if you had a different weakness. That is just my opinion of-course it is totally up to you.

everything else looks very nice. I'm not sure, but shouldn't you also provide a sample post? thats the only thing that catches my eye at this point.

[Amino]

everything else looks very nice. I'm not sure, but shouldn't you also provide a sample post? thats the only thing that catches my eye at this point.

Well, this is the part I wasn't so clear on. I was unsure if I needed to do another sample post or not due to, as I said before, I was making this one as a replacement for my previous one. From what I have been told, I didn't need to do another one since I did one before. (I'm still rather unsure of this.)

[Archano]

Well, this is the part I wasn't so clear on. I was unsure if I needed to do another sample post or not due to, as I said before, I was making this one as a replacement for my previous one. From what I have been told, I didn't need to do another one since I did one before. (I'm still rather unsure of this.)

If you've already had an RPC approved you do not need one.

[Decadence]

Since you have an in depth fighting style for this character, my suggestion would be to base your strengths and weaknesses around it so you can take full advantage of what you've written. You mention a lot of striking speed and the concept of interception, so his agility (which is the stat that also determines attacking speed) and reflexes should probably be the highest.

It's your choice, though. This profile seems balanced and acceptable as it is.

[Amino]

Edits made.

I honestly didn't think of it that way, and it would make more sense too. Thanks for pointing that out.

[Random]

For your side arms you've said Dark blue pouches on the side. When I first read that I asked myself 'On the side of what?' It took me a moment to reread your appearance to figure it out so could you change it to on his belt or something so its clearer?

I'm not sure what kind of change I'm thinking of here but to me your Katon weakness reads more of a 'Bad' than a 'Very Bad'. Could you change it to be slightly more severe?

With your bad eyesight please take out the part in the [], as it reads now you have 20 meters of perfect vision then everything is a blur. As an extremely short sighted person I can tell you that's not how it works. If you take the added on bit out and just RP it appropriately you should be fine.

[Kambei Shimata]

Still interested in this?

[Amino]

Gah, yeah. I'm still interested. Edits made, figured I say screw it with the Katon Weakness, since people keep bringing it up. Ah well, hopefully poison is better.

[Shizuka]

Gender: Male

Height: 4’5”

Weight: 115
- Pounds I presume? Please add metric and kg for the rest of us.

Appearance:
- Would love to see a bit more here, more details etc. And maybe a picture? But it is by no means needed, just a suggestion^^

Side Arms:
-1 soldier pill
- Soldier pills? O.o For a student? I would suggest waiting with these until Genin. After all, he isn't even a full shinobi yet. How would he get his hands on such dangerous pills?

Fighting Style:
- I like this, very detailed.

Physical Weaknesses:
-Horrible Throwing Accuracy
-Very Bad to Poison (+3 Posts)
-Heavy Bleeder (Very Bad)
- I think it was said before this isn't the best of weaknesses and I agree. It is very conditional and in my option doesn't really balance permanent stats like agility or reflexes.
-Bad Chakra Pool
-Bad Chakra Control
-Bad eye sight
-What kind of problem? Myopia, Hyperopia, Astigmatism or some other eye weakness? Would be interesting to know how this weakness affects him.


Mental Weaknesses:
-Arachnophobia - Upon coming across them, he has a complete mental breakdown and becomes completely unresponsive to anything but pain.
-Highly impulsive
-Ill Tempered
- Please add a sentance describing how this affects him negativly. Is he likely to be goaded into battle etc? Or just a bit grumpy in the morning? =P

Comments are, as always, in le'purple^^ I would say however that this RPC is pretty much done. Most of my comments are merely nit-picking.
But even so, I hope they will help.

[Garzett]

Spoiler!

Heavy Bleeding is actually an acceptable weakness. In fact, it's quite a nasty one. There's a medical condition that a few RPC's have, and I've seen it more often than not end a fight. You also don't need to really give details on something like bad eyesight - it'd be appreciated, but for an academy student I don't think the hassle is too necessary. Same for his ill temper one. Also, students can have soldier pills. o.O It's on the standard weapons/items sheet... It's allowed for them.

Anywho, I see no real problems here. Nice profile~

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